He looked at the laptop, he saw his new face and actually he liked it, . There he was, far away from home, where he might never go back, with a new identity, a new life.HE, Lee, the traitor.
The story begun just 8 months ago, after they shot this fella, he could be maybe 18 or 20.he thought he was brave, smart, clever than that bunch of cretins, he played with the mafia, and he lost he life, but they could just left him go, nothing would had change. Lee, that was the boy´s name. And ironically Lee was the name the police chose for him when they decided to give him a new identity, just after he betrayed his comrades.
Those were rainy days, when he was afraid of going out at night , to be shot himself ,afraid of surgery, afraid of the unknown, of his coming life.
And, in fact it took him a long time to smile again, not to think in Lee, laying in the floor surrounded by blood.
OK, I'm not sure where the backward phrase is in your text - I just don't see it!
ReplyDeleteThat said the rudiments of a story are here, but it's not all that well developed. The grammar and spelling needs a bit of checking too: Begun - should be began; clever - should be cleverer, etc.