Tuesday, October 27, 2009

Writing Game 6 re-write of "Naming of Parts"

To Heal the Wounded Soldier

Today we have naming of instruments to heal the wounded solider. Yesterday,
we had naming of body parts. And tomorrow morning,
we shall have naming of flesh eating diseases. But today,
today we shall have naming of instruments to heal a wounded soldier. The
beautiful sun reflects of the sand dunes splattered like the blood of soldiers
on the battle field of life and today we have naming of instruments to heal
the wounded soldier.

This is a tourniquet. And this is a syringe, whose use you
will see with the tourniquet. You use both of these
when you have a wounded soldier whose is bleeding or needs blood drawn.
The jeweled lizard runs down the road through
the tired feet of the wounded soldier and today we have
the naming of instruments to heal the wounded soldier.

This is an IV bag which is always used on any wounded soldier. And
please don’t let me see anyone not giving a wounded soldier an IV bag
immediately when he comes in to this medical tent. The cactus
has no blooms upon its green prickly hide for it has not seen rain
for many a full moon and today we have the naming of instruments
to heal the wounded soldier.

And this you can see is two vials of medicine. These two
medicines are the most important for a wounded soldier. The
first is morphine to ease the soldiers pain and the second is penicillin
to keep the wounded soldier from getting diseases. Always give
these two medicines to the wounded soldier. The midnight black buzzards
circle overhead looking for there next meal and today we have
the naming of instruments to heal the wounded soldier.

Here you have the tourniquet and here is a syringe these are used for
a wounded soldier. And over there is an IV bag which is always
given to a wounded soldier. Also, there is morphine and penicillin for
healing the wounded soldier. And the jeweled lizard runs
underneath the cactus with no blossoms to hide from the midnight
black buzzards watchful eye and today we have the naming of
instruments to heal the wounded soldier.


By: Cinthea L. Comer

1 comment:

  1. Very good, pure and clean pastiche or tribute to the original. I esp. like the power of the lyrical second voice which you did extremely well!

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