It‘s like it was yesterday, the feeling I had that day is so vivid. Waking up all alone, feeling so powerless, as if I had no choice over the matter and it was all up to him. When I looked into the mirror as I was getting ready, I remember looking at my own reflection and not really knowing who I was or how I had gotten to that point. Going to the train station to meet him, I trembled the whole way as I practiced my speech in silence “Honey, I think it is time to talk about the big elephant in the room. I know we haven’t been seeing each other for long, but we are in love and you have told me you are leaving your wife, so the question is really: Do you want me to keep our baby? “ This time around I was not going to melt at the sight of him, I was certain this time I would get him to show how much he loved me and our unborn baby. However that didn’t happen, for as soon as I saw him I melted down as a love struck teenager, I became numb and unable to focus. I tried to start my speech, but as I looked up and into his eyes, I blanked, looked towards the hills and said the first thing that came to mind “The hills look like white elephants don’t they?” From that moment I had lost it. I knew that all I wanted was him and nothing else in the world mattered, as long as he’d have me. How naive! I was naive, naive to think he was in love with me. The worst thing is that I was naive enough to let him decide...
By Tinna
I like this intervention, using the elephant metaphor, very much. Quite plausible entry into the girl's thoughts, well presented...
ReplyDeleteI also like how you've incoporated the elephant metaphor. Also, the way you made the girl appear very much in love with him but still aware of the circumstances, was a nice combination.
ReplyDeletei love this very much, and the intervention is totally different from mine, which gives me new insight for the story.
ReplyDeleteand this fits into the original text very well, i think this writing would be a nice introduction for me to understand the original one.