I feel alone in the world
I feel lost in my own thoughts
I feel scared by the shared life inside
All alone
I feel like wondering of to the land of the elephants
I feel secure when I am covered by the hills
I feel empty inside apart from the moving life
All alone
I feel like I am part if the white sky
I feel weightless without this burden
I feel connected to the white elephants in the horizon
All alone
I feel floating and confused
I feel drawn to the white sky
I feel calmed by the hand of the sky
All alone
HCR on 1/20/25
17 hours ago
Wow, that was awesome. It is really cool how the "I feel" captures the confusing feeling that one must assume the girl in the story is feeling.Furthermore, the "All alone" is a nice way to further depict how alone she really is in making her decision.
ReplyDeleteGood study in empathy with the girl. I like how the poem subtly includes an interpretation of the elephant image of the story - good!
ReplyDeleteI like the 'feel' that comes of with the poem as an entity. You really captured the confused stage one might feel at a new beginning like this.
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